Rewriting

Skill taught: How to map your first draft to see what you are really saying.
(I have used this technique for years.)

I sketch a diagram of the draft on a lined piece of paper, attempting to show how much of the piece is devoted to each subtopic or element written about:

For example, the student's piece entitled "My Piano Recital" may sketch out this way:
            Dressing for the recital
            Arriving at the teacher's home, seeing friends, etc.
            Performing my piece
            Enjoying the dessert buffet

In conference, I'd say, "Here's a diagram of your piece so far. I see you have three sentences about dressing. Then you have all these sentences about arriving and seeing friends. Although your piece is called "My Piano Recital," there's only this one sentence about your actual playing. Then there's this one more sentence about eating dessert, and it ends suddenly. What do you want the reader to remember about your recital after they stop reading your piece? What was the most important part of this evening for you?"

Usually, the student has energy to revise globally after this.